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please don't need me.
my skin prickles and i shiver
under crowded carpets
breathe in,
aaahh.
i am so free tied
falling over gin mouths
and crystallized fingers
transmitting futures
under my eyelids.

you like me to be there
to hurt for you
'cause i'm worth no more than that
and i guess i should say i'm
sorry for letting
you crawl this far under
each little nerve on my
spine but it won't help
i know i'm sorry
do you?

am  i weak or do you,
do you love me?
can i will you let me
be more than a tool, an absorber of the
fears falling from your tongue?
i wish i could be more
than one little girl
in  a collage of countless others.

i wish you wouldn't
oh i wish you wouldn't
but you persist and now
there are bruises on my
chest, i've taken all the
blows, i can't feel.
i don't love it
i don't love you
please don't need me
please

(do you love you?)
to you
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ilyilaice Featured By Owner Apr 23, 2011
I loved the first stanza most.
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breathingglassstars Featured By Owner Apr 24, 2011   Writer
thank you <3
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Atropaean Featured By Owner Mar 16, 2011
under crowded carpets was my favourite line here
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breathingglassstars Featured By Owner Mar 16, 2011   Writer
thank you:heart:
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Only-Another-Wraith Featured By Owner Mar 15, 2011  Student Writer
for what it's worth, you are worth it.
you're worth more than a thousand smiles and so much more than your dreams could ever hope for. you're beautiful.
and this is simply awe-inspiring. i can feel it in my bones and when i read it aloud, it's got this desperate ache to it.
beautiful.
:heart:
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breathingglassstars Featured By Owner Mar 15, 2011   Writer
"for what it's worth, you are worth it."
that made me smile so much<3
you're one of the most beautiful people everever. i'm sure of it.

ahhhh you make me want to succeed, you make me want to write more. thank you soso much
:hug:
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Avallynh Featured By Owner Mar 11, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Oh, GOD.

This is so beautiful, so awfully real. If falling apart was beautiful, ever, it'd look like this.

But it never is, is it?

do you love me?
can i will you let me
be more than a tool, an absorber of the
fears falling from your tongue?


:heart:
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breathingglassstars Featured By Owner Mar 11, 2011   Writer
aww, thank you so, so much! and i adore the fact that you gave me a quote, it makes me really happy :heart:
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Avallynh Featured By Owner Mar 11, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
My pleasure. :heart:
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CityLightning Featured By Owner Mar 8, 2011   Writer
I really love this. It's so good, I ahh can't critique it properly. I apologise. ^^; But I was listening to [link] as I read and weirdly it seemed to go well. Don't ask. xD xox
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