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i took my heart to the lake while it was hanging off of my wrist for you to smile at. it was dawn and the humidity still caught on our tongues and hair like the sun had already bounded  up and hung itself on the sky's  noose, breaking its neck just to give us warmth. the lights were just peaking over the dark green hills stretching as far as our eyes could see. the water rippled carefully, as if it was trying not to break like the feeling in my skin as it tingled; somehow cold despite the warm summer breath pushing me forward.

i rode on a moss-covered wooden boat that felt perfect to rest in; like floating through a dream. lifting each oar made the loudest sounds and i thought i'd wake the world, all for a helpless passion; all for an ill-kept secret. all the little words i'd say prickled up and down my spine restlessly-- my poor poet mind wouldn't sleep until after you. i was love-sick and horribly infirmed with the heat of you; with the idea of you. i make myself nauseously ill.

it could have taken forever or it could have taken seconds for my soaked & beautiful boat to reach the shore, tapping softly on its hand and hissing water sounds into the hill's ears. i felt myself fill up with every sound and my veins cry out,wanting to burst and fill the dark water with the essence of me; strangely cinematic. i timidly climbed through the brush with my barefeet, with lightning in my clay-brown eyes. i saw you weren't there yet. it would only be a small time before you'd join me in your careful, quiet way. i squatted above the ground and tore blades of grass into threads, anxious for you.

the dawn made its way up and up till it had ballooned the whole sky. impregnating it. my smiles had shone dark long before, and now they had evaporated entirely. doe-like, i took a walk in these woods we always liked to climb through, half-hoping i'd find you.

soon the sky was painted pink and bathed in golden light, and my aimless walk hadn't ended. my ears suddenly caught a sound from the bushes and i made my way there with my rabbit feet. i sear, i heard your voice whisper and i heard a little shallow giggle.

i pressed my fingers to the bush and carefully pulled the branches apart, wincing at what wouldmightnevermaybe come

my eyes widened.
so did yours.
so did hers.  
you tried to make knitted apologies exit out of
your wet, kissed mouth
but i wasn't listening.
you had given yourself to her and left me alone
in an unsteady boat.

the illness floated up from the center of me and i deposited it slowly in the brush behind us, shaking.
then, i ran and stumbled without looking at you-- prey from predator
and dropped myself in the boat breaking at its seams.

the boat became my lover;
i knew it would hold me as it had promised.
it took me back to earth from being suspended above.

dearest,
i am walking,
easy as i breathe.
winter

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ilyilaice Featured By Owner Apr 23, 2011
The last part was especially haunting.
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breathingglassstars Featured By Owner Apr 24, 2011   Writer
oh thank you(:
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silklilies Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
heartbreak. i know how it feels and it is there and you have put it in word of mouth
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breathingglassstars Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2011   Writer
i am so glad you think so.. because you have experienced it and i love you... i haven't experienced it. it's good that it feels real to you. :heart:

thankyou birdy
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londonrey Featured By Owner Dec 28, 2010
WHOA, that ending.. is striking.
:love:
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breathingglassstars Featured By Owner Dec 28, 2010   Writer
i'm so infinitely happy that you think so, love:heart:
thank you!:heart::heart:
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londonrey Featured By Owner Dec 28, 2010
:heart:
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A-Symmetry Featured By Owner Dec 20, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
This flows so very well! :D I like the way you wrote the part when you found him with her.
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breathingglassstars Featured By Owner Dec 20, 2010   Writer
thank you so very much<3<3<3<3
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A-Symmetry Featured By Owner Dec 20, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
you're welcome. i really liked that part:D
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breathingglassstars Featured By Owner Dec 21, 2010   Writer
i'm so glad:tighthug:
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mesmeric-revelation Featured By Owner Dec 16, 2010
All of this is extremely beautiful in description. The first paragraph especially, fantastic work!
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breathingglassstars Featured By Owner Dec 17, 2010   Writer
thank you!! that makes me smile and be so happy!:heart:
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archelyxs Featured By Owner Dec 15, 2010
A trembling description, folding softly into the night. Well-done. :heart:
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breathingglassstars Featured By Owner Dec 16, 2010   Writer
that is gorgeous, dear<3 thank you so much.
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archelyxs Featured By Owner Dec 18, 2010
You're welcome :heart:
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pagan-poetess Featured By Owner Dec 15, 2010  Professional Writer
ohhh i think this is absolutely beautiful :heart: you are so incredibly talented!
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breathingglassstars Featured By Owner Dec 15, 2010   Writer
awww, thank you so very much! that made me smile real big :love:
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pagan-poetess Featured By Owner Dec 15, 2010  Professional Writer
:D i'm so glad!! you deserve it! :heart:
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breathingglassstars Featured By Owner Dec 15, 2010   Writer
thank yooou! you're sooo nice(: i will look at your gallery veryvery soon.(:
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pagan-poetess Featured By Owner Dec 15, 2010  Professional Writer
you're so welcome!! ohhh, no rush!! nothing super exciting in there, anyway :P
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breathingglassstars Featured By Owner Dec 16, 2010   Writer
oh i'm sure there iss(: shh
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pagan-poetess Featured By Owner Dec 16, 2010  Professional Writer
:blushes: :heart:
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SilverOnBlue Featured By Owner Dec 15, 2010
i love this. i can just see the whole thing in my head, like a movie of a fairytale. soft, dreamlike, walking on water.
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breathingglassstars Featured By Owner Dec 15, 2010   Writer
thank you so much & i'm glad (: that's a lovely description<3
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SilverOnBlue Featured By Owner Dec 17, 2010
thankyou, im quite proud of it myself.
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breathingglassstars Featured By Owner Dec 17, 2010   Writer
good (:
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InTheVioletSky Featured By Owner Dec 14, 2010
You dont like this?! I thought it was amazing! I mean it could be cleaned up a little bit but other than that i love the whole thing. The boat being her lover was a great idea and...the whole thing was just amazing to me. One of my favorites despite the fact that you may not like it.
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breathingglassstars Featured By Owner Dec 15, 2010   Writer
aww thank you so much(: one of your favorites? yay!! well, with most things i write i don't really like them when i first write and post them but eventually i warm up to them, or little ideas in them.

i'm happy you liked it!! xD
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