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hiding leaves beneath my tongue
i circle prey like a whirlpool
and keep lyrics under the stairs
every night.

i hear your playful wallows bringing sores
to the roof of your mouth from here
my heaven
numbers and letters in an epitaph,
mangling sweet stairs.

i wish you wouldn't waltz down here
but you always do, seeing him out
the door and decorating the room
with your smile.

then i imagine all of you blood red
and laugh myself to sleep,
singing like a bird exposed to winter
dreaming of stealing you with
the mouth of the fox,
your staircase body climbing
into my stomach.

your wallows would bubble up
and transform my laughter beautiful
i'd escape to the place beneath the stairs.

in love with all the graves i've set,
i'll never let you free.
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rains all day.
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CityLightning Featured By Owner Nov 6, 2011   Writer
Gorgeous. There's an emotion to it that doesn't have a name.
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breathingglassstars Featured By Owner Nov 14, 2011   Writer
thank you, thank you so so much... you're too wonderful for words
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Puppy-eater Featured By Owner Jun 25, 2011  Student General Artist
Hello, you have been featured here:[link]
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breathingglassstars Featured By Owner Jun 27, 2011   Writer
oh gosh, thank you so, so much! :heart:
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It was my pleasure!
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Puppy-eater Featured By Owner May 2, 2011  Student General Artist
I love your metaphors. This is really good.
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breathingglassstars Featured By Owner May 2, 2011   Writer
thank you so much:heart:
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ilyilaice Featured By Owner Apr 23, 2011
Pretty.
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breathingglassstars Featured By Owner Apr 24, 2011   Writer
thank you(:
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Atropaean Featured By Owner Apr 22, 2011
i really like the first two stanzas and overall it is good. leaves, dying vestigials. and stairs being more unique than stars while still bringing stars to mind.
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breathingglassstars Featured By Owner Apr 22, 2011   Writer
thank you very much for the feedback<3
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silklilies Featured By Owner Apr 21, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
hey amazingness
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breathingglassstars Featured By Owner Apr 22, 2011   Writer
you're love
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psithurisms Featured By Owner Apr 19, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
it is absolutely difficult to find a favorite part in this piece but darlin' you write such beautiful words and i think i've fallen in love with this <33
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breathingglassstars Featured By Owner Apr 20, 2011   Writer
aww :hug: you are so lovely. thank you veryvery much. :heart:
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mesmeric-revelation Featured By Owner Apr 19, 2011
i love the syntax of this

and transform my laughter beautiful
and this
i hear your playful wallows bringing sores
to the roof of your mouth from here
my heaven


wonderfully twisted images, also a nice title - :heart:
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breathingglassstars Featured By Owner Apr 20, 2011   Writer
thank you so much:heart:
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