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today is hollow metal
folding onto me
and that boy said "um" at the front
of the classroom one-hundred-and-twenty-four times
(i counted)
should've spit out what he wanted to say
it's hard when you're cold and broke
he's not real i promise
fake fairytale breath
but, magdelena, darling
i eat beauty like death
oh god this is real crap but it's all i could muster

everyone should listen to first day of my life by bright eyes
"yours was the first face that i saw
i think i was blind before i met you..."
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ilyilaice Featured By Owner Apr 23, 2011
Like this. A lot.
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breathingglassstars Featured By Owner Apr 24, 2011   Writer
:heart: hurray
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breathinginthestars Featured By Owner Feb 3, 2011
'i eat beauty like death.'

oh god.
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breathingglassstars Featured By Owner Feb 4, 2011   Writer
oh god<3 thank you thank you
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AmarettoMixtape Featured By Owner Jan 30, 2011   Writer
that last line is deliciousssssss <3

i count how many times people say um...just saying, haha

i think im in love with your writing.
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breathingglassstars Featured By Owner Jan 30, 2011   Writer
thankyousomuch:heart:

me too! gosh that part was actually true, he was presenting his project and people said he did a good job and all but i was just focusing so much on how many times he said um that i didn't know what his project was even about

holy goodness that means so much to me :love:
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InTheVioletSky Featured By Owner Jan 26, 2011
I just learned how to play that song on guitar (:
It's beautiful. My sister wants it to be her wedding song.
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breathingglassstars Featured By Owner Jan 26, 2011   Writer
that's wonderful all around<3
assuming that i get married i'd like it to be mine too(:
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londonrey Featured By Owner Jan 26, 2011
i cried while listening to that song last night.
reallyreally. it's so freakin powerful.. i tell ya.
well, i would tell you, but you know.
"he's not real i promise"
"i eat beauty like death"
this.. just, GOSH.
you're brilliant and amazing and you should believe believe believe me.
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breathingglassstars Featured By Owner Jan 26, 2011   Writer
i cry basically every time i listen to it gosh i'm such sap(:
thank you sososo much that means so much to me especially coming from you
because you're all those things x121221

:huggle:
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londonrey Featured By Owner Jan 26, 2011
cos he.. like, there was my he and he.. made me feel that way.
goshgosh.
:hug:
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breathingglassstars Featured By Owner Jan 27, 2011   Writer
awwww! i hope i feel that way someday
:huggle:
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londonrey Featured By Owner Jan 29, 2011
i hope i do again.
someday.
<3
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breathingglassstars Featured By Owner Jan 30, 2011   Writer
youwillyouwill(:
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Atropaean Featured By Owner Jan 25, 2011
first two lines are great!
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breathingglassstars Featured By Owner Jan 25, 2011   Writer
thank you:heart:
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proudeyesneverlie Featured By Owner Jan 22, 2011
how... how is this crap?!

this is beautiful.
i love everything about this piece, star <3
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breathingglassstars Featured By Owner Jan 24, 2011   Writer
oh i don't know i guess i was feeling pretty much like crap so therefore everything i produced was then crap and dsdjhf

thank you so much proudy i'm so glad<3
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proudeyesneverlie Featured By Owner Jan 24, 2011
i get that feeling. but i highly disagree because nothing you ever write is crap, nor will it ever be crap. <3

:heart:
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breathingglassstars Featured By Owner Jan 25, 2011   Writer
i think most writers do at some point, you know?

awwh well that makes me smile<3 but no matter what i'll usually think it is anyway.. it's necessary for my creative process...
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proudeyesneverlie Featured By Owner Jan 25, 2011
if they don't, i want to know their secret...

i understand. though i disagree with your judgment of your work, i feel the same way about much of mine, so i can't really argue. <3
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breathingglassstars Featured By Owner Jan 25, 2011   Writer
me toooooooo....

your work is so beautifuuuul thoughhhhh<3

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proudeyesneverlie Featured By Owner Jan 25, 2011
fff so is yours :heart: in fact, i'm off to read your newest deviation now.
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breathingglassstars Featured By Owner Jan 26, 2011   Writer
aww! i'm gonna go read yours too right now<3<3<3<3
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pagan-poetess Featured By Owner Jan 22, 2011  Professional Writer
real crap?! you must be joking! i LOVE the ending of this piece.... it resonates so beautifully :heart: you're remarkable
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breathingglassstars Featured By Owner Jan 22, 2011   Writer
oh thank you very much love
aww, so are you<3
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pagan-poetess Featured By Owner Jan 22, 2011  Professional Writer
:heart: :heart: :heart:
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Rigor-Mortis- Featured By Owner Jan 21, 2011
I hadn't heard anything by Bright Eyes until 3 minutes ago. I am glad I did.

And I am glad you post things you think are crap, because truly it is anything but.

More, please.
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breathingglassstars Featured By Owner Jan 21, 2011   Writer
bright eyes is amazing, i'm glad you listened too(:

thank you <3 i'm glad you like the things i don't like but i'm quite biased seeing as i'm the one who wrote it

but

always more:heart:
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Rigor-Mortis- Featured By Owner Jan 21, 2011
We're our own worst critic, in most things. I understand.

<3
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breathingglassstars Featured By Owner Jan 21, 2011   Writer
indeed we are(:
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Book-of-LostThings Featured By Owner Jan 21, 2011  Student General Artist
Mmm, nice.
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breathingglassstars Featured By Owner Jan 21, 2011   Writer
thankyou(:
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CityLightning Featured By Owner Jan 21, 2011   Writer
Urg. I love seeing stuff from you. You know, it makes me really happy. Stuff from you and from the girl who posted before me {you know who xD}; that's what really makes me grin. Your writing is so beautiful. Believe it. xox
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breathingglassstars Featured By Owner Jan 21, 2011   Writer
oh my god thank you please have this :hug:
comments from you and everyone are what makes me warm and happy and golden feeling and you're wonderful okay

yes i do know who that is and she is so amazing
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orangecloudsraining Featured By Owner Jan 21, 2011  Student Writer
egads. your crap is amazing.

(also, the video for that song is tear-jerking)
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breathingglassstars Featured By Owner Jan 21, 2011   Writer
oh goodness i love you
and thank you so much

(OH MY GOD I ADORE IT SO MUCH I JUST WATCHED IT THANK YOU THANKYOU especially that couple at the end they were so adorable i got teary and felt silly but it's okay)
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orangecloudsraining Featured By Owner Jan 21, 2011  Student Writer
<33 'course.

(YES I LOVE IT SO ugh)
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breathingglassstars Featured By Owner Jan 21, 2011   Writer
i literally watched it four times consecutively
it just made me so ridiculously happy
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orangecloudsraining Featured By Owner Jan 21, 2011  Student Writer
:giggle: it has that effect.
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breathingglassstars Featured By Owner Jan 21, 2011   Writer
possibly my favorite music video ever
next to girls and boys by blur
or i want you back by n sync

actually i'm just kidding but those are really funny music videos
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orangecloudsraining Featured By Owner Jan 21, 2011  Student Writer
hahaah, yeeah...
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Only-Another-Wraith Featured By Owner Jan 21, 2011  Student Writer
first: i love that song so much :D *approves of your taste in music*
second: "but, magdelena, darling
i eat beauty like death"

those are amazing words and i could eat your words all day long.
:heart:
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breathingglassstars Featured By Owner Jan 21, 2011   Writer
awwh, yay! that song is perfect<3

thankyou very much, that means so much to me
:heart:
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Only-Another-Wraith Featured By Owner Jan 22, 2011  Student Writer
yes, it really is.
oh, you're very welcome. you deserve it.
:heart:
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breathingglassstars Featured By Owner Jan 22, 2011   Writer
you're so sweet! :heart:
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