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the whale ate my hunger
and now i'm a ghost,
pills setting off bombs
in the mine of my body
turning my blood toxic
and bursting the shafts
into a precarious spin.

i'll live in the spaces between
the walls without you
and pretend the stairs don't exist.

you're a tunnel behind my eyes
and it is starting to block my vision
between breaths and false eyelashes
-
sweat is not sweet and i'd like
you to stop
breathing
on
me.

lamb's nectar,
couldn't you tell me which road?
the signs are read backwards and i might be going blind today.
crowned with my own broken chair
i take the graveled road spelling east.

i might be beautiful today.

the pills you've eaten
don't really love you
and they do abhor tracing the
train tracks on the inside
of your hollow throat
they're lonely,
can't you see?

-

the whale left me in the
stomach of the ocean
and i can't swim with
the explosive
pills lathering me
inside out

.
it's so cold here


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ilyilaice Featured By Owner Apr 23, 2011
Wow.
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breathingglassstars Featured By Owner Apr 24, 2011   Writer
:heart:
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Only-Another-Wraith Featured By Owner Feb 24, 2011  Student Writer
okay so first: whales creep the hell out of me so i wasn't going to read this, purely for that fact. but then i realised i'd be missing out on something gorgeous so i ploughed on through and i'm really glad i did.
second: "i might be beautiful today.

the pills you've eaten
don't really love you
and they do abhor tracing the
train tracks on the inside
of your hollow throat
they're lonely,
can't you see?"

is beautiful in the twisted truth it is and god, i love it so much.

third: i love your writing, i hope you know that.
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breathingglassstars Featured By Owner Feb 25, 2011   Writer
whales are really creepy! man, ever since i saw that one painfully realistic sculpture of one hanging from the ceiling of the museum by these little tiny threads when i was about 5... *shiver*

oh love thank you so, so, so much :heart:
your comments are some of the best i've ever gotten....ever. they make me smile a whole lot<3 thankyou

that's so nice of you
:heart: i know now. (:
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Only-Another-Wraith Featured By Owner Mar 2, 2011  Student Writer
yes! they really are! i'm so glad you agree xD ohh, i know that feeling too - i felt like it was going to collapse on me or something stupid like that. terrifying and huge, that's what they are!
ohh, that's so sweet of you to say :blush: i'm glad you like them - i'm glad they can show even a tenth of how much i love your writing.
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breathingglassstars Featured By Owner Mar 3, 2011   Writer
definitely... slkdjf
oh gosh really? you're amazing okay:heart:
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cality Featured By Owner Feb 5, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
:wave: Hello! This deviation has been featured here: Less than thirty-five: #5.
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breathingglassstars Featured By Owner Feb 5, 2011   Writer
oh goodness thank you so so much:heart:
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cality Featured By Owner Feb 6, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
You're welcome! <3
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SilverOnBlue Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2011
then wear a jumper.
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Atropaean Featured By Owner Jan 31, 2011
lathering is an interesting choice of words. vivid piece. train track gives the impression of an accelerating unidirectional phenonenon appropo. tunnel/eye and the entire first stanza are quite nice
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breathingglassstars Featured By Owner Jan 31, 2011   Writer
oh thank you very much for the feedback<3 i always enjoy your intuitive comments(:
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AmarettoMixtape Featured By Owner Jan 31, 2011   Writer
wow. i honestly love the way you write, the images you create, the feelings you evoke. this is absolutely lovely. <3 every stanza is my favorite.
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breathingglassstars Featured By Owner Jan 31, 2011   Writer
aww, thank you <3 that means so much to me and i'm glad you like my writing!(:
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julia-caitlin Featured By Owner Jan 31, 2011
this is so wonderful, it's just so argh. i'm losing the ability to make sentences ):< its beautiful. :heart:
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breathingglassstars Featured By Owner Jan 31, 2011   Writer
aww, thank you so much! i know the feeling of losing that ability, hahah(:
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julia-caitlin Featured By Owner Feb 1, 2011
:heart:
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mesmeric-revelation Featured By Owner Jan 30, 2011
I enjoy the part with the chair, lovely work :heart:
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breathingglassstars Featured By Owner Jan 31, 2011   Writer
thank you so much<3<3
and for the favorite as well(:
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